VI-16 Recognising Space and Time in Bathroom affairs.

[TheGunnersDream]

Recognising Space and Time in Bathroom affairs.

The bath holds 40 gallons of water
yet I only displace 86 Kilograms
when I dive headlong.

From deep underwater I look and see
the blurred blue/grey of a ceiling
much in need of painting.

My hand reaches for the soap, brush
the lather enough to ruin ten years
of decomposition at the sewage plant.

The razor is sharp to the nth degree
still I apply it gingerly to red whiskers
the blood dripping that of carelessness.

I measure the distance from the bath to the toilet
then with simple ease slide a hook shot
and kerplonk!! bull’s-eye (“disposable razor” it says).

The water spirals down the drain clockwise
yet in the northern hemisphere its opposite,
I watch the water and dream weather forecasts.

The fallen heroes of Hair stick to the lathered sides
standing testament of the good fight, warrior
leaving it all for someone else to clear

[Martha G.]

You're a red-whiskered diver, bather, athlete, weatherman, dreamer, scientist, and poet all in one time and place!

The water spirals down the drain clockwise
yet in the northern hemisphere its opposite,
I watch the water and dream weather forecasts.

I hadn't thought about this. Fascinating.
Martha

[Connie]

Thane,

Few people could find a poem in the process of shaving and bathing.

I like the idea of the shaved remnants of the beard being referred
to as fallen heroes.

Connie

[Helen V]

Thane,

Amazing! I've learned a little from this poem:

'The water spirals down the drain clockwise
yet in the northern hemisphere its opposite,
I watch the water and dream weather forecasts. '

You make the bath sound so much fun. :)

'The fallen heroes of Hair stick to the lathered sides
standing testament of the good fight, warrior
leaving it all for someone else to clear'

Smiles,
Helen

[dancuddy]

Great job of transforming an everyday ritual into something fantastic and surprising. Very imaginative poem.

[allenitz]

lots of good stuff here, but this line

I watch the water and dream weather forecasts.

isn't good, it's great!


allen

[gardawg]

The bath holds 40 gallons of water
yet I only displace 86 Kilograms
when I dive headlong.

Thane, great fun this. But do you do gallons in Kiwi country?

Smiles.

Gary

[TheGunnersDream]

. But do you do gallons in Kiwi country?

Gary

The younger ones are metric, us older ones tend to use both.

Thane

[sonoranpoet]

Enjoyed this trip to the tub. Excellently descriptive and imaginitive!

Sue

[AJFolkart]

'kerplunk' is not what 'disposable' means in 'disposable razor!' Thane!!! (I'm saying this in my most mean-old-woman-scolding voice) - However, this is the best description of a bath I've ever seen, even if, living in a communal setting myself once, I've had to clean up after someone like you.

Love staring at the ceiling from underwater and the reverse twist of the drain water.

Good

Alice