The Overheard Wish

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Don Schaeffer
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The Overheard Wish

Postby Don Schaeffer » Mon Mar 20, 2017 2:36 pm

I want to be
a beacon of lust,
a victim of gangs,
torn from my disguises,
pained with
an overdose of pleasure
where pain and
pleasure merge.
Let them
know I am here,
I stand in danger,
victim of a
bug that
arrested my inside.
Don

dancuddy
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Re: The Overheard Wish

Postby dancuddy » Sat Mar 25, 2017 11:53 am

A lament?!? The bug physical or psychological or maybe social. Social? Well, like a surveillance bug---and just the possibility of it----in fact that it was installed in your consciousness like a conscience of a sort----your actions are arrested by this inhibiting bug. That's one interpretation. A physical bug would imply other things.

Interesting poem nonetheless.

Don Schaeffer
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Re: The Overheard Wish

Postby Don Schaeffer » Sat Mar 25, 2017 1:14 pm

Thanks Dan.
Don


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