CXXXVI.16. transformation

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CXXXVI.16. transformation

Postby allenitz » Thu Oct 12, 2017 8:45 am

she’s
small,
thin –
skinny and angular
to the point
it’s uncomfortable to see her
because it looks like it must be
so uncomfortable to
be her…

broad forehead,
small
sharp
chin, fingers
like spider legs,
fingernails
never quite clean

she dyed her hair blond
last night

waiting all day
for someone to notice,
mention
her transformation

no one has
and
no one will
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Re: CXXXVI.16. transformation

Postby hawkseye » Thu Oct 12, 2017 10:56 pm

Ouch! Tough to see someone thin as you describe, Allen, with other traits that, to me, indicate either an illness or a struggle with eating

she dyed her hair blond
last night


a telling turn here, one the feels metaphoric for me of the struggle between being noticed and hiding inside a very uncomfortable shell

I speak from knowing women who fit this poem.

well done

-judy

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Re: CXXXVI.16. transformation

Postby Bill_Back » Fri Oct 13, 2017 11:43 am

Wow, this has so many levels from the observation to the human need to be noticed to the equally human desire to not notice odd individuals.

Bill


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