XLV--8 A Snail's Life

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XLV--8 A Snail's Life

Postby WayneS » Mon Apr 16, 2018 10:31 am

A Snail's Life

Next life i
wouldn't mind
being a snail

living the slow life
experiencing
every tiny thing
along my path

a purely sensual life
taste smell sound sight touch
if it feels good i do it
if it doesn't i avoid it

and of course there's sex
always available
because i have both
male and female organs
and what i do
in the privacy of my shell
is nobody's business

granted i wouldn't
understand much
but understanding
is overrated anyway

and if life gets too much
for me i
could always disguise
myself as a pebble
or a shell

most people
would walk right by
and leave me alone

which is the best part
of snail life
unless you find yourself
in France

so as long as i stay away
from France
and garlic butter,
a snail's life
wouldn't be too bad
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Re: XLV--8 A Snail's Life

Postby dancuddy » Mon Apr 16, 2018 10:45 am

I like numerous things about this poem---which, by the way, is delightful throughout

This is a good life, though morality has some place to govern in human life but it isn't a question of morality in this poem---at least not in these lines---they consider a life of pure sensation

a purely sensual life
taste smell sound sight touch
if it feels good i do it
if it doesn't i avoid it


This stanza tells the truth of the Garden of Eden, the lesson learned (or one lesson from a certain view)

granted i wouldn't
understand much
but understanding
is overrated anyway


The ending stanza turns the whole poem into a smile. At first I thought "France"? Well, this stanza explains it all----except for the taste for snails which may be a n acquired taste like for oysters.

so as long as i stay away
from France
and garlic butter,
a snail's life
wouldn't be too bad

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Re: XLV--8 A Snail's Life

Postby hawkseye » Mon Apr 16, 2018 1:20 pm

What an interesting possibility, Wayne --
on one hand, the metaphor works for the "ideal" retired life -- take life as it comes at whatever pace suits the day, etc.

From another view, I think about the wisdom of this snail life for all of living -- be securely present right here and NOW in order to have those sensory connections moment by moment and to KNOW whether one might do well to mosey along or settle for a bit and enjoy the tastes

This resonates with the challenges of being human:

granted i wouldn't
understand much
but understanding
is overrated anyway


Seems the more I understand, the more I don't understand and how there's often more clarity in being focused on what's right beneath my feet (or snail body) than in all the pontifications of scientists, etc.

I'm wandering about with my words, but only because the poem was/is fun to read and gets me thinking about how many ways we humans struggle to make life work while something as seemingly simple (though it isn't) as a snail seems so content with its lot (and has been a part of this earth for longer than humans--according to my just completed research)

leading to your trademark snappy, humor landing us in a batter of butter -- unless....

-judy

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Re: XLV--8 A Snail's Life

Postby Bill_Back » Mon Apr 16, 2018 5:46 pm

Avoid the salt also.

Good look at life from a different perspective.

Viva the escargot'

Bill

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Re: XLV--8 A Snail's Life

Postby allenitz » Tue Apr 17, 2018 6:36 pm

i enjoyed this poem a lot, funny and fun

a the life of a snail, low housing costs and easy to be well fed. just don't try crossing a busy sidewalk.

and of course there's sex
always available
because i have both
male and female organs
and what i do
in the privacy of my shell
is nobody's business


i wrote a poem once about the sex life of a snail, including a snail orgy. if i could easily find it here, i would post it. of i remember right they have little darts (kind of like snail penises) that they throw at each other.

allen
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