CXXX]VIII.04. hidden moon still makes its presence known

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CXXX]VIII.04. hidden moon still makes its presence known

Postby allenitz » Thu Nov 30, 2017 8:36 am

dark morning,
sky overcast under deep clouds,
the moon
unseen
unremarked
but for it’s tidal tug on my pulsing
heart…
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Re: CXXX]VIII.04. hidden moon still makes its presence known

Postby Bill_Back » Thu Nov 30, 2017 10:43 am

it’s tidal tug on my pulsing
heart…

I love that line. Good poem.

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Re: CXXX]VIII.04. hidden moon still makes its presence known

Postby WayneS » Thu Nov 30, 2017 11:36 am

Nicely done.

These little ones are so much harder to get right than long poems.....

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Re: CXXX]VIII.04. hidden moon still makes its presence known

Postby hawkseye » Thu Nov 30, 2017 12:12 pm

unremarked
but for it’s tidal tug on my pulsing
heart…


As Bill noted, these lines == I try to convey its effect and too many words pour forth from me. Layered, sensory connected and more

packed a lot in this one, Allen

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