rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

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rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby hawkseye » Sun Oct 30, 2011 5:55 pm

The cinq "car" I follow was posted by Sue under "combustion"

breathing
Palo Verde
exhales all his oxygen
green branches dance and wave at me
I hum

--- MY CINQ ---

rush hour

I hum
along, catchy
tunes bounce against honking
horns, rush hour jam surrounds, creates
new tunes

- hawkseye

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby sonoranpoet » Sun Oct 30, 2011 10:20 pm

new tunes
buzz in my ear
the hummingbird buries
beak deep in a chuparosa bloom
fertile

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby AJFolkart » Sun Oct 30, 2011 11:00 pm

fertile
seeds buried here
aleep in this dear earth
birth--one more sunrise, one more spring
awake

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby Crispus » Sun Oct 30, 2011 11:23 pm

fertile
seeds buried here
aleep in this dear earth
birth--one more sunrise, one more spring
awake

Wake up!
Seven o’clock!
Did you plan lazy morn’?
The boss demands your back and brain –
Punch in!
Crispus

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby connied » Mon Oct 31, 2011 1:38 am

Punch in
punch out the freak
that glares from a dark niche
crimson canines bared, tongue trickling
verbose.

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby Wiltshire » Mon Oct 31, 2011 3:25 am

verbose—
the only word
for the fat gray squirrel
in the tree outside my window
screeching

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby Helen V » Mon Oct 31, 2011 9:10 am

Screeching
a bat flies past
my face at Halloween
party as I wait in garden
outside

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby sonoranpoet » Mon Oct 31, 2011 10:42 am

Outside
a green finger
beckons trumpet flowers
blow their horns ants take notice
crawl on

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby connied » Mon Oct 31, 2011 11:15 am

crawls on
past old paint flakes
reflecting on dinner
in the old clapboard haunted house
spider

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby AJFolkart » Mon Oct 31, 2011 12:06 pm

Following Connie's spider



Spied her
watched her running
She, unaware he's there
in the shadow of the dogwood
it's spring

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby WayneS » Mon Oct 31, 2011 12:40 pm

It's spring
at least in mind
I caught the fever so
I will sub this unedited
lazy

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby Wiltshire » Mon Oct 31, 2011 1:23 pm

lazy
I stay cocooned
counting the long minutes
until darkness falls and I come
alive

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby AJFolkart » Mon Oct 31, 2011 10:06 pm

Alive
arrive right now
hop on board, whistle blows
Toot, toot, gangsters shoot only blanks
No thanks!

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby Crispus » Mon Oct 31, 2011 11:51 pm

No thanks,
politely said
brings forth sad smiles and nods
OK fatty replies my love,
Tuesday
Crispus

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby Helen V » Tue Nov 01, 2011 10:10 am

Tuesday
starts the real week,
the week of flurry style,
activities not needed now,
'morrow.

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby hawkseye » Fri Nov 04, 2011 12:16 am

mrrroww
said the cool cat
curling her silky tail
around my leg, look, I brought you
a mouse

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby AJFolkart » Fri Nov 04, 2011 3:37 am

A mouse,
don't grouse, it's mine
a little friend so sweet
pink nose and tiny feet, sharp tail.
Loves me!

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby Crispus » Fri Nov 04, 2011 9:24 am

Loves me
or not, I'll eat
the furry thing with sauce
or stir-fried, side of brown rice, but
no pie.
Crispus

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby sonoranpoet » Fri Nov 04, 2011 11:56 am

no pie
or potatoes
no turkey to get stuffed
we're heading out to fill our plates
such bliss

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby 'Ilima Stern » Fri Nov 04, 2011 2:32 pm

blissful
resistful, not
wot! I'm cooperative
don't I do what you ask of me?
kiss me!

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby AJFolkart » Sun Nov 06, 2011 11:13 am

Kiss me!
Do it now, Bub!
Don't rush. Keep your teeth in.
Breakfast to follow. Ham and eggs.
Enough!

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby Wiltshire » Sun Nov 06, 2011 4:12 pm

Enough,
she said and killed
him dead, a fatal race,
to see who won. Tiny girl, yes...
big gun.

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby hawkseye » Mon Nov 07, 2011 1:15 am

big gun
little boy caught
in games on darkened streets,
dad gone, mom on drugs, gangs became
his home

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby AJFolkart » Mon Nov 07, 2011 3:19 am

His home
is his castle.
Deep moat around his heart,
no approach, drawbridge up, watching.
Alone.

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby Wiltshire » Tue Nov 08, 2011 4:46 pm

Alone,
but not without
company, I study
my life, trying to understand
myself.

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby 'Ilima Stern » Thu Nov 10, 2011 11:34 am

myself
I'm all alone
don't got no company
don't mean I'm looking for trouble
suits me

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby hawkseye » Sat Nov 12, 2011 12:48 am

suits me
like a turtle
shell, allows defiance,
plotting, planning my next move all
alone

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby hawkseye » Fri Nov 18, 2011 12:08 am

alone
curtains drawn, tears
provide comfort, heavy
heart mourns our song, without your voice
along

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby hawkseye » Tue Nov 22, 2011 6:42 pm

a long
delay obscured
the way. Lost in turmoil
I turned within, embraced the sweet
silence

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Re: rush hour (follows 3rd cinq under combustion)

Postby 'Ilima Stern » Sat Nov 26, 2011 9:55 pm

Silence
None of that here
Screeching, yelling next door
Going on since Wednesday night now
Neighbors


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